Pretty Crazy

This sounds interesting. Definitely something I would continue reading. But be careful. There are a lot of wolf stories about prophecy and such. I'm curious to see what you're going ...

That was beautiful. The imagery you portrayed was incredible. I'm curious to see what's happening here. Do write more. ~ Crazy :P

He he. I found it kind of funny. Like how he slept with the watermelon? I liked it. It was very original. I can't figure out what the ending is ...

I must warn you, this may be a harsh review. Keep in mind I'm just saying what I'm thinking. We both want this to be helpful. Enough chatter, on to ...

Wow. This is very, very good. And it's a christian story too. That's great. Let's see if I can find some nitpicks: GOD, what a sweet child, I don't think ...

LOL! :lol: That was hilarious! Granted, I couldn't understand what was happening in some parts but it was still sooooo funny! I thought the muffin would be a good guy ...

I do like this story quite a bit. However. When are you going to get on with it? I want something exciting to happen. Or at least give us readers ...

Interesting. Not much happened though. Basically he just introduced himself. What is going on with his life right now ? This was just an overview of who this guy is. ...

Even though it's so short, there's a lot of detail in this little paragraph. Good job! Here are some nitpicks: i breathed out, "I" should always be capitalized. No matter ...

Interesting concept. I'm curious to see where this goes next. Like all writers, there are a few things you could improve on. But before I get into that. Here are ...

Your writing is good. Very alive. Very entertaining. But. (you knew that was coming didn't you?) It needs more description. It was all rushed. You introduced characters so fast I ...

Hmm, I like how you started without a lot detail. It kind of summarizes it and gets the reader into it. Also, it was wise to not have the entire ...

This is the first christian-based story I've ever seen on YWS. Thank you! I cannot wait to see what happens next. This was very intense- especially the first part. I ...

This was really good. Somehow you balanced action, description, emotion, and what time this was set- and this is the first chapter! Oh, and you didn't have too much stuff ...

Okay that's a very short story. It should almost definitely be extended. You need to explain your characters better. Why is this girl here? Etc. Oh and it needs to ...